Dy's Take

January 12, 2012

Changeling by Yasmine Galenorn

Filed under: ChickLit,Disappointing,Erotica,Paranormal — Dy @ 22:56

(04) Otherworld #2

2/18/12 – Review Coming (today is update the booklist day — will add reviews as I finish them)

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September 11, 2011

Blood Reaction by D.L. Atha

Filed under: Erotica,Indie Author,Review Book — Dy @ 22:50

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Disclaimer:  I got this book free as a review copy. It was sent to a friend who has a much more active (and more frequently updated) book blog to review and it’s not really her cuppa so she gave it to me. — Also, spoilers below.

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My honest-to-goodness first thought when I started thinking about how to write this review was, “It wasn’t as bad as I was afraid it would be.”

I could leave it there, but I won’t.

First — my standard advice to all indie authors — EDIT EDIT EDIT.  Really. You CAN do it yourself, you just have to be willing to extend your publication timeline to allow the time for it. Or pay someone else to do it.  I freely admit to being a freelance editor, but this is not a sales pitch.

Your book is your baby — give it the attention it deserves so that your character doesn’t mention to herself in each of the first two paragraphs of the book that her daughter is an only child (example drawn from this text). It’s jarring and pulls the reader out of the narrative.

The formatting was pretty clean, but despite it being a paper copy — which usually gets more/better eyes on the layout and proofing front, I could still tell it was an indie print.

That’s is for my editing comments.

The story… Was an intriguing premise, but couldn’t follow through. The idea of a medically verifiable reason for vampirism was intriguing, but it was all guess work on the part of the main character — no labs, no proof, and a lot of conjecture.

The sex? Well, not being a fan of rape scenes (okay, really, is ANYONE a fan of rape scenes?!) this really turned me off early on in the book. The big bad guy was one dimensional, the build up to the climax was too uneven and slow in spots with jumps in time that annoyed the hell out of me.

It’s not awful, but it really wasn’t very good, either.

3/5 for a neat concept that just needed more development (and less rape)

October 27, 2010

I Will be Your Dominatrix by Sarah Welcombe

Filed under: Erotica,Short Stories — Dy @ 16:50

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Another one awash in internal dialogue, lame and too infrequent sex and bad writing. While the free erotica from Amazon is usually pretty bad, the free stuff from B&N is even worse, based on the two I read today.

I have to go scrub my brain now.

Parking Lot Hero by J.M. Snyder

Filed under: Erotica,Short Stories,Skip It — Dy @ 16:28

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This was a short story about the two main characters from the author’s series of longer works.

Twas also my first experience of gay pr)n. Which is so very not my thing, though I do try to maintain an open mind.

The writing was hideous though, and the plot thin and drowned in internal dialogue and there was only one sex scene.  As a not-fan I’m grateful, but if I were a fan of the genre I’d be really ticked off.

All this negativity and I’m totally ignoring the basic premise of the series and therefore the story–one of the men develops superpowers after sex courtesy of his telepath partner’s …er… bodily fluids ejaculate.  I’ve read the same thing in straight erotica and it’s just as ridiculous an idea there.

October 16, 2010

Better Late Than Never by Savannah Stuart

Filed under: Erotica,Short Stories,Skip It — Dy @ 22:56

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Vanilla, even by my fairly tame standards. Painfully vanilla in fact. I kept waiting for it to get hot and it never did. *sigh*

June 26, 2010

Her Very Special Robot by Ann Jacobs

Filed under: Erotica,Skip It — Dy @ 11:44

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Free Kindle prOn. Which is good, because if they charged for it people would be po’d.

That, and apparently erotica is getting more diverse.  The author used terms I was genuinely unfamiliar with and I’ve WRITTEN in this genre — felt sort of like I needed a thesaurus.  And the dialogue was awful. But, well, this stuff is a lot like it’s filmed counterpart–not created with strong writing in mind.

As an erotica fan, though, I’d still say skip this one.

December 18, 2009

Holiday with a Vampire: Christmas Cravings (by Maureen Child) and Fate Calls (by Caridad Pineiro)

Filed under: Book Club,Erotica — Dy @ 22:08

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I did this to myself.  I was sick to death of the Christmas books my book club insists on every December & no one else had any ideas last year so I snuck this in just for something different.

I should have just knuckled under and read another lame feel-good book because this was dreadful.

October 26, 2009

Dangerous Pleasures by Bertrice Small

Filed under: Erotica,Fantasy — Dy @ 23:53

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Graphic, and once it got going the writing got better—the all-plot & no action setup at the beginning of the story was a little rough–choppy dialogue, excess adverbs, etc.

Ms. Small excels at the erotic portion for the most part, but is weak on the writing of the non-sex elements.

I’m actually starting to think there is not truly good erotica out there. Either it’s a romance with sex thrown in for spice, it’s just graphic sex with no plot, it’s paranormal and not intended as erotica, or it’s just out and out bad. Would it kill publishers to edit this stuff a little more, “Hey, your main love interest sounds like the male lead in an adult film–” “Horny and nonverbal with really bad dialogue? You mean I have to fix it?”

Ugh.

Overall a silly premise and a goofy/weird ending, but well, it is pr0n for women, not classic literature.

October 23, 2009

Irresistible Forces by Brenda Jackson

Filed under: Erotica,Romance — Dy @ 11:50

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This was my first e-book, read via the Kindle app on my new favorite toy, my iPhone.

I’m poor, having just bought said toy, so it was a freebie. And yet I still paid too much, in my time if nothing else. The sad thing was it had potential. It was a nifty premise, something that never would have occurred to me, but it fell short on the intent front. Too much sex to be a straight romance but the sex scenes were too uninteresting (and too ‘off-camera) to qualify properly as erotica.

The writing was unappealing—lots of adjectives, so many that they began to detract from the plot rather than enhance it. Perhaps even more offensive to me, the copyediting was abysmal.  Sadly, it was free for a reason.

I hope the print version, if there is one, got a better editorial eye than the Kindle version.

Keep your peepers peeled, kids. I’m reading another e-book using the Barnes & Noble e-reader app so I can do a compare & contrast review in a few days.

October 2, 2009

The Brass Bed by Jennifer Stevenson

Filed under: Erotica,Skip It — Dy @ 17:48

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I read this one based on a friend’s positive review. My feelings were not as positive.

I always complain about the lack of plot in erotica (it would be nice to have more of one most of the time.) This had a decent plot, but the overall poor writing overshadowed it. While kids are taught in elementary writing to use vivid dialogue tags, the bottom line fact of the matter is 90% of the time it’s better to just use “said.”  That little word disappears where the others stand out and are often the weaker choice. Also: adverbs are weak writing. -ly is NOT your friend. .

Just sayin’

For me this book was also lacking in the relationship department. Too unromantic to be a paranormal romance, too tame to be erotica. It was barely R-rated. Which is fine, but not what I was expecting based on how it was advertised. Throwing in a few dirty words does not erotica make.

I checked out the whole series from the library, but the other two are going back unread.

May 31, 2009

Joker’s Wild: Call Me by Lena Matthews

Filed under: Erotica — Dy @ 10:11

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Blech. I was gonna say this just kinda sucked, but, considering the subject matter, that might be taken as a compliment.

This was not entertaining. The writing was marginal, the plot outside the sex worse than thin, and all the references to and emphasis on rear-entry intercourse just really turned me off (no inference intended, I just plain didn’t like it.)

April 12, 2009

Candy Girl by Diablo Cody

Filed under: Erotica,Memoir — Dy @ 23:16

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I wasn’t as thrilled with the movie “Juno” as my husband or the media, and didn’t have high expectations for this memoir-of-a-year-in-the-life by the film’s scriptwriter when I borrowed it from a friend in a stack of other books.

I finished it in a little over 12 hours, captivated by the author’s dry, wry wit from the very beginning.  I loved this book.  Cody’s book reads like a conversation I might have with some like-minded friends, not the subject matter or experience, but her voice and word choice.  Smart, earthy, and at times hysterically funny.

The book, subtitled “A Year in the Life of an Unlikely Stripper,” is not really, as tagged, erotica, but it is, at times, over the top graphic so the appellation seems appropriate.

April 2, 2009

Trouble by Sasha White

Filed under: Erotica — Dy @ 22:50

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Since Candy publicly nagged me…

This one was better than the last erotica, the two novellas bound into a collection.  This one made a few stabs at character development and the plot frame was a little sturdier, but not much.

I appreciated the sex in this more because while it very lightly touched on the subject of *thinking of euphemism to prevent hideous spam comments* “going in through the ‘out’ door” (Sorry Prince!) it didn’t actually GO there.  I realize that is a widely-accepted sexual practice, but I don’t want to read it myself.

I liked the concept of working through a fantasy list, too… I’m guessing that could add spice to a lot of monogamous lives.  Except the whole sex with a stranger thing. Besides, who the hell DOES that? Someone who has lived in a Siberian cave the last 20-30 years and isn’t afraid of things penicillin can’t cure? *shudder* I also thought the two guys & a girl scene was tastefully done.

I’m probably revealing my inner conservatism here, and I’m okay with that.  I occasionally enjoy reading erotica–though I like it more wrapped in a paranormal storyline ala Laurell Hamilton. I’ve written more than a little of it (can ya say NaNoWriMo 2006?!) and edited it for other writers.  But there are just some things I don’t want to form a mental picture of, ya know?

Happy Candy?!

February 28, 2009

Kink by Saskia Walker & Sasha White

Filed under: ChickLit,Erotica — Dy @ 15:39

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Yea, no.

I have no problem with erotica, but I think it should have little checkboxes or warning labels.  Both stories in this two-novella book had elements that don’t appeal to me.  I nearly gave up on it. I think I would read more erotica if it had some kind of warning label or rating system.  There are things I just don’t want to read, you know?

Beyond that, the first novella, “Sex, Lies, and Bondage Tape” was just bad.  The plot was so thin you could shoot porn through it and the character development was nil.

The second, “Watch Me” wasn’t ~much~ better, but at least it occasionally had whole chapters where no sexual activity of any kind took place so it could pretend to be a real book 🙂

I’m going to take a wild stab here and say I do not think I am the target audience for this sort of book.  I have another loaned to me by the same friend that I’ll get to sometime in the next month or so, see if it changes my mind.

February 11, 2009

Swallowing Darkness by Laurell K Hamilton

Filed under: ChickLit,Erotica — Dy @ 15:34

( 14 ) Meredith Gentry, book 7

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